Sunday, April 4, 2010

Poetry Bus - Flower Power

So this week Swiss was our expert poetry bus conductor... and he gave us these images to inspire some poetical wonderment.

Here's what I got


Rachel Fox said...

There's quite an army of flower power this week!

I love how you get into the...mind and world of the daisies! Not everyone could do that (or think of it...). Quite dreamy. Good use of stars too.

Titus said...

Yes, this was quite other-worldly, and the rhyme and pace really contributed to that.
Loved this bit:
"Unthinking heads tight

Carpels gaurding the night

Closed things are protected"
and then the repetition of

"Closed things are protected".
Surreal and intriguing and I had to read it a few times. Nice one.

Emerging Writer said...

I like the idea of gegtting into the head of a daisy rave. Thanks

Poetikat said...

Niamh, I like that theme of "closed things protected", yet still vulnerable. Very nice interpretation of the image. Amazing how one image can mean so many different things.


swiss said...

the3re was lots of loveliness in here - my favourite was the advisor to daisies. that should be a real thing!

Niamh B said...

Thanks Rachel - yes I think flowers are pretty attractive poetic subjects really.
Thanks Titus, interesting your comment on pace, don't think I was conscious of that, maybe I have to reread a few more times too!
Thanks EW - didn't quite think of a rave, but that's a great interpretation!
Thanks Kat - Isn't that the joy of these exercises? all the different slants?
Thanks Swiss - yes I could definitely see myself applying for a job with the Daisy Advisory Board. I'm just freelancing at the moment, but there's little enough to do, what with no actual daisies being actually around about now... Great Bus Driving anyway tho!

Argent said...

Niamh! What a corker! I love the building of this. I wasn't too sure where we were off to at first but it just got better and better and I could see how it all hung together. We all need to "Stay awake and aloud"!

Peter Goulding said...

Vive le daisy revolution!
Great fun, Niamh!

crazyfieldmouse said...

love love this, so many beautiful images in it.
thanks for sharing

Totalfeckineejit said...

Lovely idea beautifully executed.those daisies don't know what they are missing.Is this a parable?

But remember everyone....

'Beware of the flowers coz I'm sure they're gonna get you,yeh'

Niamh B said...

Thanks Argent - very sweet of you to say so!
Thanks Peter!! yes, rise up daisies everywhere - you have nothing to lose but your chains!
Thanks Crazy field mouse, I suppose field mice would be fond of daisies wouldn't they?!
Thanks TFE - I suppose it is... it's one that I'm not sure I fully get what I'm saying - is that a good thing I wonder? yes beware of the flowers is right anyway

Pure Fiction said...

Lots of daisies down here in Kerry that need supervision.
This is a really nicely phrased poem and I really like the way you bring it right back to the title in the last two lines.

Niamh B said...

Thanks PF - either that or I came up with the title after writing it!