Messages, Pictures & Poems
A gaping gap, a sleeking sap flows down
A stainless steel tree
The waves surprise, faint shudders, sighs, frowns,
Tie in the listener – He
is frozen while a dozen slow things
Crawl over his aching bones
The noise goes on, the boys all gone
Messages, pictures and poems
Arrive daily on reflective screens
Tears glisten on shiny old cheek
The leathery skin keeps them out
Eyes bathed in punishing doubt
He keens
Memory laughs – glimpses a half – when only birds
Twittered, singing dawn joy perpetual.
And virus attacks meant hours in bed sacks
Not blank screens deader than usual. No.
And only love mattered, and real walls
were spattered with
messages, pictures and poems
13 comments:
nice poem, quite sad really. I'm gonna give this a bash cheers.
I like the rhythm of this poem and the nice space within it... melancholy and dark... :-)
This reminded me for some reason of EM Forster's story, "The Machine Stops".
Liked the contrast between computer screens and real walls.
Thanks: I'll put a link to it on my blog in my ghost road berlin challenge post.
Look forward to reading what you come up with Uisce
Thanks Watercats... I like the van pic - twas a dark bit of music.
Thanks Dominic - good challenge! keep em coming! :-)
I like your stainless steel tree!
x
Oh, these ones are so interesting! Same piece of music?
I loved the opening and all the internal rhymes, and then that "No." and the last sentence with "real walls"
Quite chilling. Impressive response to the prompt. I just got wind and waves and bells!
Thanks Rachel! told you metal would be the theme.
Tks Titus, glad you enjoyed it. All from the same prompt.
Mitag eisen- metal.
i really liked the line 'when only birds twittered', it really caught my eye. you've lots of nice wee bits like that in this. i liked it a lot
Thanks Swiss - had mixed feelings on whether to even put it up, glad i did now.
Tks TFE - insightful commentary as always :-)
It will be hard to eradicate that image of the stainless steel tree.
I can get into this mindset.
Kat
I like the stainless steel tree too and pretty echo what other have said here. Glad you put the poem up in the end.
Ah Thanks Muchly Kat & Argent :-)
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