Monday, January 25, 2010

I can't be waiting till friday - a monday poem

TFE has kindly thrown an open invitation to the castle, once you have a poem with mention of a car... and guess what? I have! and it's not even the one about the car breaking down... and I know I'm supposed to wait till Friday, but I never had patience for that kinda thing, and Monday is the new Friday, and I'm feeling ridiculously queasy, so will post this now with the last ounce of strength in me...
here it is
hope you like

Have removed this - since it's being published !!! but if you want a copy, just mail me,
Cheers

21 comments:

Rachel Fox said...

Queasy?

Totalfeckineejit said...

Tsk, tsk, I don't know.You media people are all go go gadget.
Tis a real nice poem though, has your bro ever seen it?

As Foxy says 'Queasy' ? Are we to expect the pitter-patter of tiny cushions?

Niamh B said...

The queasy has passed, think it was a dodgy lunch... wanted a bit o sympathy - not a rumour fest!!
Yes TFE, (re the bro seeing the poem, just so we're clear here) - sent the poem to him by the email - him being so far away, he liked it.

Titus said...

Oh, I liked this, and identified so closely - being a sister to four brothers.
Killer of a final line. And I loved "merriment at mass".

And my goodness, I have just watched a rumour being born.

Domestic Oub said...

This poem makes me sad.

Uiscebot said...

I love this. Nice poem.

Niamh B said...

Thanks Titus - 4 brothers! yikes.
Oub - Poems are supposed to make you sad!
Thanks Uiscebot, glad you enjoyed

Rachel Fox said...

As Adrian Mitchell might say 'sorry bout that'. I'm going to blame all those poems about babies and pregnancy and children in Nuala's Red Car book!
x

Niamh B said...

It was probably the pink blanket as well in fairness Rachel, easy mistake

Domestic Oub said...

I have three brothers. Here is a poem about them.


Hey, have we met before?
You look familiar!
oh.

the watercats said...

I love the sentiment in this poem, a really nice memory collection, like a short film or run of photos..
beautifulll!

Niamh B said...

Oub - great poem, you should send it to them (if you have an address or anything)
Watercats - thank you very much!

Poetikat said...

I've experienced some "merriment at mass" in my day. I enjoyed this very much.

Kat

Karen said...

I'm the big sister, too, of a most wonderful brother, and your descriptions of childhood hold true with me. I remember the day I realized he was bigger than me. What a shift in thinking that entailed.

Great tribute. I love the insertion of the car.

willow said...

I protected my little sis just like this. Nice piece!

Maura said...

you know how many brothers I have and I loved the poem! Brought a tiny tear to the corner of my eye!

Niamh B said...

Thanks Poetikat - mass was a great place for the merriment, all the supposed to be silent bits - perfect.
Thanks Karen - the car was there before TFE came along I must admit. Thanks Willow - I know, we do get protective around our clan don't we? - altho he was older - that's why the big boy laughed - he would've been twice my age at the time, and I was threatening him!
Thanks Maura, glad you liked it, and yes you've a fine compliment of brothers there, endless poetic possibilities for you :-)

Dominic Rivron said...

Like the way it starts moving in the second verse, the first being a sort of introduction -at least, that's how I read it.

Niamh B said...

Thanks Dominic, I think you're right with the first bit being an introduction alright

Argent said...

I loved the simple language in this, the words conveyed the snapshots of memory with once getting int he wya. Triffick!

Niamh B said...

Thanks Argent!