I decided to write about meeting a special someone... - it is a little vomit inducing, but I can't think at the moment, so for me this is about the height of it.
When you meet
.
Let shyness slip, like sunlight off a lake
you're home and can sink into
long longed for warmth
.
and feel the thrill of spilling incandescence
an essence of acceptance
a nameless need for more
.
clutch with your grasping fingers
linger on the trace of folding
when you find the magic, hold it
keep it safe, and keep it fast
your very life depends upon it
feed it, love it, make it last
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an essence of acceptance
All the best meetings include this magic ingredient! :)
And the ticket will last many a long journey.
Not vomit inducing - just soft and sensual. This you should re-post on Valentine's Day. Nothing sickly sweet about it.
Sinking into longed for warmth - that's exactly how I felt when I met my husband. Only I didn't know it at the time. Nice!
Yes, lovely...especially the life depending on it.
x
Warmed up my day!
Thanks Jinksy, and Anil P, and Karen, and Bug, and Rachel and 120 socks - each comment is muchly appreciated
xox
Nope, no nausea here either! This was a nice friendly warm poem.
My favorite line is the first. Beautiful imperative!
A warm tender love poem.Not a specky splash of vomit to be seen.Likes it I do.
Thanks Carolina and Argent/ TFE - yez must have stronger stomachs than me!!
this has a really classic rhythm to it... very nice and I wouldn't say it's that vomit inducing, it doesn't mention fluffy bunnies or eyes like deep lakes... really nice to read, and perfectly lovely!
this has a really classic rhythm to it... very nice and I wouldn't say it's that vomit inducing, it doesn't mention fluffy bunnies or eyes like deep lakes... really nice to read, and perfectly lovely!
aha - but it does mention a lake - maybe I forgot to put in the bit about the eyes.
and the sighs.
Thanks Watercats
Well I vomited all over the kitchen floor...
Seriously, a great opening and not half bad for someone struggling to find the Muse at the moment...
Gag. Just kidding!!!
I love the sunlight slipping line best. I know it's the first, but I did read the rest, honest.
Not bad at all. Oh, well I know those moments of unthinking.
Kat
Thanks Peter, hope you have it cleaned up now.
And thanks Kat - so it went down hill from there? (Only messing)
That's lovely, tender, like sunlight on a lake- slippery and shimmery
Thanks EW!
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