This week's task was to use the word verifications as a prompt, a genius suggestion by the lovely NanU - more riders will be found on her blog here.
Here's what resulted for me:
Verification
They wandered, stray forgotten myths,
The half thought, forbidden golden thoughts
bits driven to survive for aeons
they’d scintillate – a fraught and
lying spark in someone’s eye
a precious drop inside a yellow box
they were free, they floated
All that ended when the web was wove
Empires of Elves and struggling Strings of Sprites
were meshed into, and gargled, smothered down
their magic subtervented, spells ran dry
kept in check by electronic ether
none free, all information soon tied down
and it was owned by those who bought the engines
sold tickets for a world of windows
to the whole-wide-world-wide-web
Only alive now in the tests for humans
They try to get their humble message out
Octydle, Fwhorb, and fjowie, kweerb and drueman
It comes across as nonsense, feeble shouts,
My mind twists a second, trying to catch the mean
But then a shiver later, it is lost,
hopeless as a dream
19 comments:
This is really amazing.
"Only alive now in the tests for humans
They try to get their humble message out
Octydle, Fwhorb, and fjowie, kweerb and drueman
It comes across as nonsense, feeble shouts,
My mind twists a second, trying to catch the mean
But then a shiver later, it is lost,
hopeless as a dream"
I love this "the feeble shouts"
very nicely tolkien :-) love the way this poem flows... very purdy!
yes yes!
gales of applause.
you rock Niamh. "My mind twists a second." Much more beautiful & profound than my dirty limerick.
Lovely, lovely, lovely. A competition winner maybe...certainly a heart winner.
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You have taken 'word verification' to a whole new level! Wonderful!
I love, love, love the idea that VWs are communications from a lost and smothered magical world. What a fabuulous idea and so genuinely poetically expressed. Applause!!!!
Beautiful Niamh, and I love the imagination that took you to the origin of the words, and our struggle for their meaning. And such sadness!
Breathtaking.
Beautiful Niamh, and I love the imagination that took you to the origin of the words, and our struggle for their meaning. And such sadness!
Breathtaking.
Some sprite got me.
Ooh, a properly poem from the gobbledeygook!Quite a thinky thing, philosophical unflimsy whimsy. I likeee!Good, good.
Ohh that was one Fab poem.
I haven't given it a try this time..
But Jizz you were so good in there...When I first started surfing net n saw these verifcation words, I really could not understand why I had to rewrite something so unintelligent, then got the point behind them...
Loved your Poem :)
And in fact this one would be a good one to video...easy visuals - random wvs...and you reading it over them (slowly please...).
Could be a big blog hit! I'm not one for pixies and elves normally but I love this. And Titus is right - the sadness if really moving.
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Thanks Gwei, Watercats, NanU, Jessica, Rachel, Helen, Argent, Titus, Titus, Titus, TFE, Erratic Thoughts...
Rachel - If only I knew how! must go on a course of some sort.
I'll be round to see all yours when I can, have been a little busy this weekend.
Wow. What a brilliant poem. Your brain works in mysterious and fantastic ways - am going to shuffle off into a corner now and curl up in an envy inspired ball.
Exquisite is the word that springs to mind.
Ah thanks PF, just the response I hoped for.
And thank you very much weaver, very kind!! :-)
Just realised I never commented on here after reading (I sometimes get a bit overwhelmed by the amount of respondents these days).
This is a really fresh take on the prompt - and in the process creates a real sense of yearning - even sadness - for something lost. Nice One. Whonscoo!
Kferby Flitters and tkansh Padhraig!
This could actually turn into a terrible habit couldn't it?!
lol
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