Sunday, August 15, 2010

Enchanted Oak's enchanted poetry bus

This week the brilliant enchanted oak is driving the bus, see here for the rest of the bussers.... I chose the hands picture, but then what I wrote, I found to be a little bit rubbish, maybe it's the weather... Anyway - so here's an old hands related poem that's a little less rubbish hopefully...



Hard as Nails

Fingernails are the hardest thing on me, on the outside

If you don’t count my teeth

And please don’t count my teeth

I was careless, lost a few to love of sugary stuff

No, not in fights

In spite of the hard image, I’m really soft inside

A pussycat, mango, weeping willow, marshmallow

Big buttery pillow, I melt easy,

Soft when you squeeze me

Please, please don’t tease me

I’m sensitive

Ease me

And I’ll ease you back

22 comments:

Summer Ross said...

This was really cute and fun. Thanks for posting for our reading pleasures.

Helen said...

Loved it! Still have my teeth but a few are 'iffy!' I plan on entering an old poem I wrote while caring for my mother .... as I gazed at her hands in mine.

Gwei Mui said...

Great take on the picture. I'll never quite thinbk of nails in the same way again

Emerging Writer said...

ease me and I'll ease you back. Lovely and suggestive.

Enchanted Oak said...

Whew! Sultry! I'm melting a wee bit here at the steering wheel.
P.S. I wonder what your "rubbish" looks like. Hard to fathom.

Dominic Rivron said...

Good one. Like the details like the loss of teeth to sugar and the mango bit especially.

Titus said...

Ah, sound, sound, sound. This one was sweet in my mouth.

jinksy said...

Soft hearted does it for me! :)

Erratic Thoughts said...

:D I loved this, Loved this!
Very sweet and Fun poem...
You are a softie:)(like a coconut!)

Rachel Fox said...

Ah, I have found my tribe - the marshmallow people!
x

Martin H. said...

Great use of the prompt. I was charmed by this.

Scott said...

a nice reflection, a ponderence as if the subject sat staring at her own hands... I like this!

NanU said...

I like how the title contrasts with all the softness that's in it.

Titus said...

The marshmallow people! Brilliant.
Get that lovely ex-marine bloke to do an expedition to visit them. His name won't come...arghh... Bruce Parry! (shouting at husbands useful sometimes)
I love Bruce Parry!

Doctor FTSE said...

Full of neat observation, and the tongue ever-so-slightly-in-the cheek so nicely done.

the watercats said...

awww... you baby kitten you... loved reading this poem, it is actually, somehow sticky... nice!

Niamh B said...

Thanks all muchly, glad my marshmallowness isn't an issue among such good bloggy friends!

Dave King said...

Clever that, turning the image back on itself and coming out all marshmallow. Liked it very much.

crazyfieldmouse said...

interesting take on the photo, really like it.
thanks for sharing
cfm

Niamh B said...

Thanks Dave and Crazy field mouse - most kind

:-)

Totalfeckineejit said...

Ilkiesthis , tis coolio, vulnerable, and a bit clever.What more could yawant, a pint?

Niamh B said...

Wouldn't mind now TFE, thanks muchly!!