Monday, September 7, 2009

Poems for the community, by the community, about the community



So another week, another TFE challenge;
This time a pome about someone in a public place.
have to write it in 5 minutes flat... the pressure

Right
Wispy headed you grab your usual chair
at the counter
and for the first time, I see
the triangle of lighter cover in your hair
the start of your baldness
I've noticed you before
because you're the spit
of a guy from long ago
but you're not him really
and you've seen me too
and you can feel me watching
because you swivel in the seat to see
who's staring in indecency at you -
and I want to explain, it's not my fault!
it's TFE!
but you just lightly smile,
you may think I'm trying to flirt
while all the guys from work
sit around me talking matches, and roy keane
and you walk out again
a swagger in your pace
and you've been seen
this younger version of a long ago male beauty queen

13 comments:

Totalfeckineejit said...

Mrs Niamh,what can I say ? A poem of the people, by the (diva) people, for the peeps, innit? I've fecked up in me instructos, there was no time limit, but then if there was on this-it worked!It's a real moment,'flirt' and' work' almost rhyme in me dazzled head,then there's the highly unlikely pairing of 'Roy Keane' and 'male beauty queen'.And if a baldy bollix of a man looks at a woman she just thnks 'Weirdo' but if a woman looks at a baldy man ,no matter how much of a bollix, he always thinks 'she fancies me' Oh! the male ego, a barrage baloon ready to blow! Don't get carried away now,I'm drunk.I'll probs think it's shite in the morning, ;)

Niamh B said...

that's cos it prob is!!

Tks for callin over

Domestic Oub said...

Love it Niamh :)

Niamh B said...

Tks Oub! you joinin in?

Domestic Oub said...

I have actually written something, but my blog isn't showing as having being updated on anyones bloglist... weird. Go to my blog, tell me whats happening you end?

Domestic Oub said...

I have actually written something, but my blog isn't showing as having being updated on anyones bloglist... weird. Go to my blog, tell me whats happening you end?

Domestic Oub said...

Ok, seems to be working now...

Niamh B said...

heya - all ok on this end now,

over and out

NanU said...

wonderful!
how people change when they notice they're being noticed.

the watercats said...

Really liked the observation of this fella :-D Sounds like you made his day bless him!.. I love reading all these moments, cheers!

Totalfeckineejit said...

Nope still ,good. Head hurts though.

swiss said...

am off to the library. may have to try this for size.

water poetry done

Niamh B said...

Tks Nanu - tis true.
Watercats - I'd say this one is well used to being admired - in his own head anyway...
Tks TFE - you obviously haven't fully sobered up yet.
Swiss - that's sound, cheers - knew I could count on you...