UP CORK - WOO HOOOOOOOOOooooooo!!!!! etc... now that the fairweather fandom following the first 20 minutes of GAA watching of the year is over... on with the bus
Today's poetry bus prompt came from Don't feed the Pixies, who has unfortunately left blogworld for the time being, perhaps he'll be back sometime - the quote from them is over here at Argent's place, and Argent has kindly agreed to host the bus this week for the prompt that DFTP left us with as their last bloggy action.
The prompt was to write something appropriate to read at a wedding, non-religious.
I wrote the following - warning: slush factor is very high, so don't proceed unless you have a very strong stomach
Love
Our meeting was an anchor
solid, lasting, plain and true.
We didn’t notice scrambling tide
yet I swam straight out to you
pulled out by an attraction
strong, magnetic, fine and fair
knowing only that I’d met one
almost perfect. One so rare
that life’s questions seemed less daunting
once you held me, close. I waited
for the feeling to get weaker
but I hadn’t calculated
on the way your strange pure self
and I, mixed up and made our pairing
mean more to us each single day,
here’s life, it’s made for sharing
14 comments:
Not slush - just good, strong, proper love.
x
Strong stomach ... but didn't need it, of course (romantic that I am) I loved it!!
Nah, not that slushy but very good reading. Liked the sea images very much.
This task is really bringing out the worst in people.
Or maybe I'm just jealous.
It's a corker!
No no, I'm with Rachel, that is not slushy. I loved the opening two lines and then that repetition of four adjectives again in line 6.
And missing out any "to" in the final line makes it so much stronger.
It was good to read about.
That was a solid punch...(wgich I got from the opening lines!) :)
I liked it, the hell, I loved it!
It's not slushy but just perfect love!:)
Nothing wrong with a bit of slush now and then, and this is beautiful rather than slushy. I love it.
Not too slushy at all ... just right for a nice hitch-em-up.
Not slushy! Patience Strong has cornered the market in slushy.
Thanks Rachel x
and Helen, twas just as well to warn ye all the same!
Thanks argent - just thinking fathom needs to get in there somewhere
Thanks Peter, you're quite right. ;-)
Tks TFE - you and me - GAA Champs!!
Tks Titus - only noticed the adjective repetition now that you've pointed it out, and the "to" never came into the last line.
Thanks Erratic Thoughts, glad you enjoyed
Tks very much Heather, v kind.
Tks Acorn, hitch-em-up - maybe that should have been my title, you really should get on the bus yourself some time.
Tks FTSE - gosh, hadn't heard of her, tks for the introduction...
Oh this reminds me of MY marriage. So of course I love it :)
On the other hand, my word verification is phalical, which makes me wonder what's really on my mind LOL.
Oh, this is just wonderful! I would read this at my wedding.
Aw thanks Bug and Karen
xx
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