I must admit I cringed a tiny bit when I saw the task, feeling that I wouldn't do well, the crooked sixpence poem ringing loud in my head - but I dove in anyhoo - and below is the result - you'll find far crooked-er lines and better poems on the bus over here...
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The Line
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I am a crooked line
running through a life
making time
stretch or tumble
explosions of fine
delights or depths
of sadness defined
I follow my instinct
stumble on crimes
of passion or boredom
or closing of blinds
releasing the afternoon sun
from a kind
of duty to be there
weakened old shine
relieved to slink off
leaving grims to their grime
while I rise and I fall
or I slip to the side
life follows me, stupid
with wanting to mind
to live for one moment
feeling something divine
unaware it’ll keep -
keeping on with the line
that’ll never run straight
and gets home just in time
By the way, I wanted to apologise to recent drivers for my lack of letting them know I had bought a ticket - I noticed one week that Peter G did the same one week when he knew he wouldn't make it around to visit all the other passengers, and I felt I should do the same since I don't have the same time in blogland that I used to have... but anyway, there's my excuse - not notifying the driver makes me feel less guilty for not calling round to everyone - but I do still appreciate your comments and try to make it back for return visits to anyone who does call over...
11 comments:
Ha! I foiled your plan because I saw that you'd posted a poem so I added you to the list anyway :) But it's ok if you don't get around to everyone - we know you're busy with a MUCH more important task.
About the poem - I really like it. Following that crooked line until it brings you home. Isn't that the way it always is? You think you're being a rebel & then next thing you know you're shopping in the same store with your grade school teacher. That might not be what you meant, but that's what I took from it.
Another nice one Various!
my life is much a crooked line that led me eventually home as well....i really like the pic you end with as well...very beautiful
I love the idea of it making time!
and eventually getting home- Thanks!
As long as home is there at the end of the line, what more could one ask? :)
Various, you took us on a journey that is familiar to me and others.
I think we ride the Bus because we are all a wee bit crookt.
We’ve all gone crooked
Great assonance in this - would love to hear it out loud.
(Oh and surely you know better than to hold me up as a role model???)
The best road maps always come with crooked lines ... Your scribbler art is divine!!!
Tks Bug, very kind, and I think the getting home just in time can be interpreted a few ways, and they're all alright with me.
Tks socks, and thanks Brian, I just enjoy the scribble!
Glad you liked it izzy, and jinksy too :-)
Tks oak - lookin forward to check out your link
Peter - you best be careful what you say, with impressionable "young" folk like me around - I have an average age of 15.5 you know.
Tks helen - and thanks again so much for the colour tip, hours of fun!!
Sad lovely lovely sad typoething
Thanks TFE
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