This week Peter Goulding is driving the bus, and encouraging us to share tales of drunkenness or write a pancake centred poem in the style of a particular poet, or write a rondeau (fancy!). Be sure to visit him here to see what the other mischievious bus poets come up with.
I'd have loved to try and do all three, but my poetic energy levels are low, so I'll have to go with just the one. So, I give you....
A Pancake with Guts
After Charles Bukowski
I used to come home drunk from a day losing at the horses
and sit down by the cooker while the woman made pancakes
Me and the 3 legged, one eyed dog
Sat on the linoleum, growling at each other
Listening to the sizzles getting hotter
Each flip leading to a new riot
An opening of a universe
Of shouting pancakes with no sugar, just cutting lemon
Sharper than a razor
And while I ate
the old dog’s whines were a kind of sauce on the side
making everything taste better
while the woman went and showered
and I heard the dog’s heart sinking
to his toes
23 comments:
Ahh give the poor dog a pancake!!!!
Clever and witty as always!
Ooo so good.
thanks for sharing
martine
That's a wonderful picture that you paint there, Niamh. Must check out Charles Bukowski - I've heard the name but never read him.
That's really good as a poem and as an impersonation, I can hear Bukowski's voice as I'm reading this!
Socks, it actually hurt to sound so mean, even fictionally!
Tks a mill martine, glad you enjoyed.
Peter - he's strangely compulsive to read. Definitely check him out - there's lots of his poetry online.
Tks TFE, tisn't a patch on the real deal, but it was an interesting exercise.
I really liked this poem a lot - but I agree with socks about giving the dog a pancaked.
My favorite line is, "Each flip leading to a new riot An opening of a universe..."
I'm a Bukowski fan from way back and I bow (bow-wow) to your fantastic impersonation. And a vivid poem in its own right. Loved the whole thing, but the ending just socked me right in the muzzle.
The dog will get the whole pancake in the next poem, I'm sure of it.
Nice one, Niamh!
That is BRILLIANT! Really enjoyed it Niamh.
I think the very last thing I expected to see from you was Bukowski, but my god, you nailed it, er him. I loved every word, but the dog's whines like sauce? there is no superlative for that line!
Kat
P.S. Yours makes me feel like a shrivelled up school-marm in the corner, by comparison.
I agree with Kat ...
"the old dog’s whines were a kind of sauce on the side"
deliciously cruel.
Tks a mill Bug, yes, no dog in my house will go hungry on pancake day, in real life anyway.
Tks Oak, Nothing can match the real thing, but it was great fun pretending :-)
Yes NanU - I'll have to make poetic amends.
Tks Padhraig, glad you enjoyed :-)
Tks Kat, yeah I've been a fan for awhile, hard to know why, he's such a meany pants after all, but I just find his stuff completely compulsive- and it's far from a school marm you are :-)
Acorn, funny that you enjoyed the dog suffering bit most, would have never thought it of ya, ;-)
Niamh, as you are in Cork, any idea where Castle Kevin is near Mallow? We have just learned my husband is directly descended from the Badham-Thornhills who owned it.
I come from the poor of Norn Iron, and he comes from the rich landownwers in the south. Ha!
Hi Kat, no idea of Kevin Castle I'm afraid, have spent 2 nights ever in Mallow, both memorable, one when we were kids and ran out of petrol there, before the days of late opening stations.
- the second was a teen reunion from irish college full of the boldness of being 15.
Neither occasion brought me near any castles! Sorry to be of no help to you, that's exciting though, do you think ye might come and visit? try and find it?
Niamh, that poem was fantastic!! Pure genius.
A pancake with guts .. love the man, dog, woman angle ~ don't know the poet, but I'm going to Google him now.
Thanks Oub :-)
Helen, glad to have introduced you!!
love. love. love!
I knew there was a reason I bought Bukowski's collected poems with my Christmas book token. This poem!
Superbo!
Some day, I sure hope to!
Tks Watercats and Titus :-)
Cool Kat, we'll be waiting for you!
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