tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post4691819696069894584..comments2024-01-31T13:17:39.976-08:00Comments on Various: Poetry Bus - Firefly pictureNiamh Bhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-47296665668271677642010-06-02T23:46:54.741-07:002010-06-02T23:46:54.741-07:00Thanks Jessica, a good doctor should be able to he...Thanks Jessica, a good doctor should be able to help you with that!Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-77480538449543368362010-06-02T16:31:57.368-07:002010-06-02T16:31:57.368-07:00I'm late as usual - agree about 'her-shape...I'm late as usual - agree about 'her-shaped patch.' it's brilliant. Think I may be catching that poetry disease.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15658342110714675627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-11928377500214498682010-05-26T00:06:01.797-07:002010-05-26T00:06:01.797-07:00Thanks Oak, very kind of you to say so, glad you m...Thanks Oak, very kind of you to say so, glad you made it back from the forestNiamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-9078229889122133962010-05-25T10:01:20.602-07:002010-05-25T10:01:20.602-07:00Niamh, you have created a lovely scene and a vivid...Niamh, you have created a lovely scene and a vivid girl, taking a daring act and experiencing redemption. A beautiful job. <br />I hopped on the Bus late, as I was lost in the forest for the weekend, but I'm so glad I made it here to read your work. My take on the prompt is up, if you want to stop by.Enchanted Oakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14815997287116818456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-22422983293873099592010-05-25T09:22:03.904-07:002010-05-25T09:22:03.904-07:00Thanks Lorenzo!Thanks Lorenzo!Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-20135659449824706062010-05-25T03:44:07.079-07:002010-05-25T03:44:07.079-07:00As enigmatic and appealing as the photo.
"sh...As enigmatic and appealing as the photo. <br />"shallow her-shaped patch<br />carved out in swaying oats"<br /><br />stays in my mindLorenzo — Alchemist's Pillowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07522265816460154722noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-11758645696558578142010-05-25T01:23:46.050-07:002010-05-25T01:23:46.050-07:00Thanks Terresa, it was a brilliant prompt, nice dr...Thanks Terresa, it was a brilliant prompt, nice driving.<br />Thank you Padhraig! very kind.<br />Thanks Argent, glad you liked.<br />Thanks Peter - there's an ointment you can get for that.<br />Thanks EW - all the best people went to your school.<br />Thanks Titus, I'm really happy with all the feedback!<br />Thanks Karen, it does sound a little like hyperbole, but it's still most welcome :-) <br />Thanks Gwei Mui, I'm glad you got so much from it :-)Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-14490948131258959972010-05-25T00:04:08.381-07:002010-05-25T00:04:08.381-07:00For me there is hope, memory, possibility and some...For me there is hope, memory, possibility and some sadness in this verse I will be re-reading this poem again and again. The lines that struck me the most are<br /><br />from shallow her-shaped patch<br />carved out in swaying oats<br /><br />This is so beautiful and it really did <i>shine</i> for me@ctors Businesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04118148558033452749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-66919129725989221142010-05-24T17:51:04.007-07:002010-05-24T17:51:04.007-07:00Outstanding! I want to use all caps. This is unbel...Outstanding! I want to use all caps. This is unbelievably, breathtakingly good. That may sound like hyperbole, but it is absolutely not. I'm stunned and going back for more.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-41676431206436965572010-05-24T14:01:23.568-07:002010-05-24T14:01:23.568-07:00Yes, yes, yes to all of the above! On a re-read I...Yes, yes, yes to all of the above! On a re-read I can't pick out what's great, as it is all so integral, but on my first read I, too, was really hooked by<br />"from shallow her-shaped patch"<br />and<br />"- this is fact".<br />Just loved it. Really good one.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-17718161065348554692010-05-24T12:39:19.296-07:002010-05-24T12:39:19.296-07:00super idea, VC, neatly done.
- this is fact. I thi...super idea, VC, neatly done.<br />- this is fact. I think she went to my school...Emerging Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06539530495238043923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-36693624379984203172010-05-24T12:03:38.421-07:002010-05-24T12:03:38.421-07:00Yes, agree with the above. Loved the her-shaped pa...Yes, agree with the above. Loved the her-shaped patch in the swaying oats.<br />(My head is currently shining pink)Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-75260967366713156632010-05-24T10:41:40.718-07:002010-05-24T10:41:40.718-07:00"her head shone gold
and the befriended orb
w..."her head shone gold<br />and the befriended orb<br />whispered glistening warmth into her ears" - super ending to a genuinely lovely poem.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-18496136602948970992010-05-24T10:13:30.256-07:002010-05-24T10:13:30.256-07:00Wow. And Wow again! I'm with NanU - this is de...Wow. And Wow again! I'm with NanU - this is delicious.Padhraig Nolanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11010869074911253314noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-25934469104871761732010-05-24T09:20:10.310-07:002010-05-24T09:20:10.310-07:00This is a magnetic poem, meaning, it pulls me in s...This is a magnetic poem, meaning, it pulls me in so completely, I don't want it to end.*https://www.blogger.com/profile/06484208765656281917noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-62832122422658856492010-05-24T08:19:37.371-07:002010-05-24T08:19:37.371-07:00Thanks NanU, and Rachel x.
And thank you watercats...Thanks NanU, and Rachel x.<br />And thank you watercats - as always you're very kind! <br />Thanks TFE, interesting comment on the difference in style, must think about that.<br />Thanks Kat, it was fairly unconscious - the alliteration at least!<br />Thanks Dave, nice to hear it.Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-53089635268465950322010-05-24T07:46:08.648-07:002010-05-24T07:46:08.648-07:00Great stuff. Loved it enough to keep reading it.Great stuff. Loved it enough to keep reading it.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-57598547600564399162010-05-24T05:41:22.574-07:002010-05-24T05:41:22.574-07:00I really liked how you inverted the syntax in &quo...I really liked how you inverted the syntax in "From shallow her-shaped patch..." (and of course the alliteration - like that too).Kat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-19829305579537901642010-05-24T04:25:41.434-07:002010-05-24T04:25:41.434-07:00Definitely ne of your best and a slightly differen...Definitely ne of your best and a slightly different style that I like.<br /><br />'from shallow her-shaped patch<br />carved out in swaying oats'<br /><br />is beautiful.Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-21271692876584906182010-05-24T03:58:22.745-07:002010-05-24T03:58:22.745-07:00wow!.. along with other's of yours.. this one ...wow!.. along with other's of yours.. this one really does it for me! Love the 'her-shaped patch'.. just stunning!Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-58859685496861601882010-05-24T01:44:37.097-07:002010-05-24T01:44:37.097-07:00'This is fact' - love it.
x'This is fact' - love it.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6862054200092259163.post-24140404681037054862010-05-24T01:32:26.631-07:002010-05-24T01:32:26.631-07:00delicious!delicious!NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.com